Dear Umesh,
Unlike others I am not going to compliment you on your presentation nor just criticise. I will ask you few questions which may help you in clarifying your objective.
If we may, we would like know what you do and where (in which industry) and how much experience you have in making presentations? The last question is to ensure that we are not preaching to an expert.
I am not clear about the objective of the presentation. I was taught that every presentation should start with a statement of the outcome of a presentation, when participants take an active part. Then say what one wanted to say, and finally conclude witha statement of what was said.
In my presentations (I have attached on on Research Methodology at CiteHR), I tend not to do conclude but request the participants to do so.
Somwang has given a good framework in the form of a "mindmap" which I suggest you use to improve the content.
Have a lovely day.
Simhan
Learning & Teaching Fellow (Retd)
The University of Bolton, UK