Seeking Feedback: How Can I Improve This Message to Inspire Innovative Ideas?

Thank you all for your valuable suggestions. I appreciate all your personal views on the suggestions we would like to implement. However, we didn't receive clear views for the improvement of our organization. Most of you mentioned Marketing Activities, which is good, and we have started to implement it. We are expecting suggestions such as business ideas, a business plan, and some innovative ideas for the development of our organization. So, let's think outside the box and come up with innovative ideas.

This is the message I want to convey to my employees. If anyone can make corrections, please do so.

Regards.

Dear Sehma, I would like to help you with this. Hope you find it helpful. I am typing it below for you:

Dear all,

First of all, I would like to express my gratitude to the brilliant staff we have at our organization. Thank you, everyone, for your valuable suggestions. I must appreciate your personal views about the suggestions we would like to implement.

Unfortunately, we did not receive any clear views about organizational improvement. Most of you suggested marketing activities, which are really good, and we soon plan to implement them.

However, we are expecting suggestions more focused on:

- Business ideas
- Business plans

Basically, we are looking for some unique and innovative ideas and suggestions that could help in prospering our business. So let's think out of the box and come up with innovative ideas. Because employees make up the organization where it stands. It is the attitude and hard work of the employees that will make us successful in the future.

Awaiting your active participation. Thank you.

Regards

Dear Sehma, please see this write-up. Very minimal changes have been made to your write-up.

"Dear All,

I would like to thank all of you for the suggestions provided. I must appreciate your personal views regarding the suggestions we would like to implement. However, we did not receive any clear views regarding the improvement of our organization. Most of you appreciated the marketing activities, which we have already implemented.

Furthermore, we are expecting a few valuable suggestions for the following:
- Business Ideas
- Business Plan

Some innovative ideas are expected for the development of our organization. Therefore, we need to have out-of-the-box thinking and come up with new innovative ideas."

Thank you!

Regards,
Bharghavi

Dear Semha, here is another version.

Request for Innovative Ideas

Dear all, we had solicited innovative ideas for the development of our organization. We sincerely thank those who have contributed suggestions. A majority of the suggestions are about Marketing Activities, and we have started to implement them. However, we did not receive any clear views for the improvement of other areas.

We will be grateful if people can give ideas for improving the business as a whole; for example, improving the Business Plan. So, please put on your Thinking Caps; let us think 'OUT OF THE BOX' and come up with innovative ideas for developing our organization.

Regards.

I am sure you will definitely improve if you have a strong desire. Even though I am a freelance writer, I see myself as supreme. By the way, you would be surprised to know that even I don't consider myself strong in my vocabulary. I always keep learning new words and understanding the needs. But, I am sure if I start learning and maintain my determination, I will certainly master the vocabulary in the future.

Communication Tips

Remember one very important thing: whatever you communicate should be according to the needs and situation. For example, in your case, you wanted your employees to come up with innovative ideas for business development; therefore, you need to be very simple and precise in your communication. That's the reason why I keep my language and words pretty simple and easily understandable.

Have a great day!