Nice presentation, but I think you will agree with me that everything can be improved. Just a few suggestions, especially for the first slide.
Identifying the Focus of Desire
To me, before creating a burning desire for something, it is very important to first identify what the individual wishes to focus his/her burning desire on. Identify, define, visualize, and make it crystal clear—what they want—to earn their first million/billion in 2 years, to double the income in 10 months, to publish 3 books in the next 3 years, to be number 1 in their field of endeavor, etc. This will likewise serve as a punchline to win the attention and focus of your audience. Hope this helps.
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Onilrem - Philippines