Need Help Updating My Confirmation Letter to Reflect Current HR Best Practices

I just sent a draft confirmation letter to my boss, and he rejected it as "old school" and directed that I submit one that will cover issues of current HR best practices. Kindly help me look at the attached and assist me. I am submitting it by tomorrow morning. Thanks all. 🤔

Hello,

I was wondering if you searched on citehr. But anyway, it looks like you recently joined citehr. I have attached a few documents found on this same site. Just glance through them. You know, going through such samples will help us improve our own ideas and do much better.

Yours look good, but maybe you could make it more compact (short) yet conveying the message.