NK SUNDARAM
Soft Skill Trainer / Hr Consultant - India
ACT
Training, Motivational Speaker, Writing,
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Thread Started by #shallu sabharwal

Dear Members, I need to organize badminton match for employees. Can anyone suggest me mail format to be sent to employees for sending information related to this game? Regards Shallu
15th October 2012 From India, Haryana
Hello,

Please don't think I am rude. Cant you not write simple sentences English ? Is it too difficult to try out something yourself, like a Recipe for a new Dish ? Disastrous recipe may cause even bodily harm if cooked and eaten. However, if you attempt yourself in writing in English, nothing will happen. Never feel shy or hesitate because you may make mistake or something. Unless you attempt, when will you start learning ?

For even writing a leave letter or a resignation letter, youngsters immediately rush to CiteHR. It is really a worrying trend. Why don't you please try out yourself and post it here so that we can at least correct it.

How long do you think, you can go on asking other's help ? Unless you attempt yourself, make mistakes, learn from them, one can never improve in life. Success is 10% inspiration and 90% perspiration.

Please do make an attempt yourself and come back to us. It will take me just two minutes to give you. What they say is: Instead of giving a fish to the needy everyday, teach the person how to fish ! That is what I am doing here.

Best wishes
15th October 2012 From India
Dear Mr. Sundaram,
Thank you for inspiring me for writing mail draft for sending information to employees.
Earlier I made one mail draft but asked for ideas for choosing the best format.
Pl find below details and suggest changes.I have also selected images which i will be incorporating in the mail.
I have also mailed you this draft on your gmail id.
Dear ALL,
Badminton match is being orgnanised as part of employee engagement for encouraging healthy relationships, and promoting fitness and fun through friendly competition.
Match start date : 22.Oct ….
Timings : During Lunch hours - (1:45-2:15)pm
Tournament structure information will be sent shortly.
Note : Participation is compulsory

16th October 2012 From India, Haryana
Hi
First of all I support Mr.Sundram's point of view that one must make an attempt first and then seek help. I must congratulate Shallu on taking the feedback positively and for making that attempt in drafting the circular.
While the draft is a good attempt, I would suggest that whilst drafting the focus must be on answering the following
What is the subject matter of the mail?
Why is the mail to be send?
Who is the mail to be marked to?
What must the content of the mail include?
What action is needed to be taken by those reading the mail?
Is there any additional information/ input to be enclosed?
In fact in the above draft you have prepared, the tournament structure is a critical element and should form an integral part of your communication.
I am sure Mr.Sundram must have sent you a corrected draft, if not I would suggest you attempt another draft using the pointers given above.
Best Wishes
16th October 2012 From India, Mumbai
Dear Mr. Jacob, Thank you for the response. Mr. Sundaram has already mailed me the draft. I will always keep in mind the points which you have suggested me for writing mails. Regards, Shallu
16th October 2012 From India, Haryana
Here is mail drafted for Friendship day...activity and one month planner .
Hi all,
📢
We will be celebrating Friendship Day on Saturday, the 4th of August 2018. 👫👯👭👬🏃
The Friendship Day Dress Code will be wearing a coloured attire from the below mentioned list.
Each colour holds a different meaning. Read to know:
Red is the colour of fire and blood, so it is associated with energy, strength, power, determination as well as passion, desire and love.
Yellow is the colour of sunshine. It's associated with joy, happiness, intellect and energy.
Green is the color of nature. It symbolizes growth, harmony, freshness. Green has strong emotional correspondence with safety.
Blue is the colour of the sky and the sea. It is often associated with depth and stability. It symbolizes trust, loyalty, wisdom, confidence, intelligence, faith, truth and heaven.
White is associated with light, goodness, innocence & purity. It is considered to be the color of perfection.
Pink is a delicate colour that means sweet, nice, playful, cute, romantic & charming.
So, what's the colour you stand for? 👕👗👘👚
That's not all!
The following coloured Friendship ribbons will be distributed to all.
Green - Evergreen friend
Red - Energetic friend
Blue - Motivational friend
Pink - Faithful friend
Yellow - Understanding friend
Tie these ribbons to your evergreen, energetic, motivational, faithful or understanding colleagues & spread the joy of Friendship!🎇
The one with the maximum number of Friendship ribbons will be awarded the 'Mr. Vista Buddy or Miss. Vista Buddy 2018' 👑🎁
We have also arranged a 'How to Invest & Save Money' talk @ 5:30 p.m.💰💸
Hoping to see active participation by one and all on this friend-filled & fun-filled Saturday! 🎉
During this month, the following activities are lined up:
AUGUST 18 MONTH PLAN
SR NO DATE DAY PLANS TIMING
1 4.08.18 Saturday Friendship Day celebration 5.30 TO 6.30
2 10.08.18 Friday Carrom Tournament - Doubles 5.30 TO 6.30
3 15.08.18 Wednesday Independence day- Holiday
4 21.08.18 Tuesday Basic Etiquette at work - How to draft an e-mail 4.30 TO 5.15
5 22.08.18 Wednesday Bakri Eid -Holiday
6 25.08.18 Saturday Carrom Tournament - Doubles 5.30 TO 6.30
7 31.08.18 Friday Carrom Tournament - Doubles 5.30 TO 6.30
7th August 2018 From India, Mumbai
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