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I request can any one help me out to check my sentence regarding the announcement to whole employees if there is any correcton plz let me know immediately.
Dear all,
Thank you to all for your valuable suggestion .I have to appreciate your all personal views about suggestion we like to implement it.
But we didnt receive clear views for the improvement of our organization.
Most of you all said about MArketing Activites really its good and also we start ed to implement it.
We expecting suggestion it can be like :
Business ideas
Business plan
some Innovative ideas for the development of our organization.So lets think out of the box and come out with innovative ideas.
tgis is the matter i want to convey to my employees so any one plz make a correction.

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Dear Sehma,

I would like to help you with this. Hope you find it helpful. I am typing it below for you:

Dear all,

First of all i would like to pay my gratitude to a brilliant staff we have at our organization. Thank you everyone for your valuable suggestions. I must appreciate your personal views about the suggestions we would like to implement.

But unfortunately, we did not receive any clear views about the organizational improvement.

Most of you suggested about the marketing activities, which is really good and we soon plan to implement it.

However, we are expecting suggestions more into:

- Business ideas

- Business plans

Basically, we are looking for some unique and innovative ideas, suggestions which could help in prospering our business. So lets think out of the box and come out with innovative ideas. Because, employees make up the organization where it stands. It with the attitude and hard-work of the employees which will make us successful in the future.

Awaiting your active participation. Thank you.

Dear Sehma,
Please see this write up.. Very minimal changes have been made for your write up...
" Dear All,
I would like to thank all of them for the suggestions provided. I must appreciate your personal views regarding the suggestions we would like to implement.
But, we didnot receive any clear views regarding the improvement of our organisation.
Most of them appreciated the marketing activities and we have already implemented it...
Further, we are expecting a few valuable suggestions for the following:
- Business Ideas
-Business plan
Some innovative ideas are expected for the development of our organisation. So, we need to have out of box tihnking and come out with new innovative ideas..."
Thank you..!!
Regards,
Bharghavi
Thank you ,siddhesh it is very clear and uaseful. I need a one more help from you , still i would like to improve a lot in my written skill. can u plz help me out . regards. sehma.
Dear Sehma, Share me your e-mail ID.... I will send you the material to improve your written skill... Regards, Bharghavi
Dear Semha
Here is another version.
Dear all,
We had solicited innovative ideas for the development of our organization. We sincerely thank those that have contributed suggestions. A majority of the suggestions are about Marketing Activities; and we have started to implement them. However, we did not receive any clear views for the improvement of other areas.
We will be grateful if people can give ideas for improving the Business as a whole; for example, improving the Business Plan. So, please put on your Thinking Caps; let us think ‘OUT OF THE BOX’ and come up with Innovative ideas for developing our organization.

Dear Bharghavi, I couldnt able to share my mail ID though im a new user, so could you please send the link of that material? are any other way is there?
You are most welcome Sehma. It is really good to know that you are still eager to learn. No one is a master at all the things. Each one has some strengths and some flaws. I would definitely like to help you improve in whatever best manner possible
I would suggest you start writing a personal diary and learn new words and try to use them in your sentences and while you speak. Also, listen to good and inspirational speeches. As far as possible, watch movies with English sub-titles. Any other help, do ask me. Thank you and have a great day!
Thank you Siddhesh ,
Thank for your ideas,better i will make a sentence and let to know the correction from you guys
I think this will help me to learn and improve myself .i hope that you can make me to broke my hurdles.
Regards,
sehma.
I am sure you will definitely improve if you have a strong desire. Even though i am a free lance writer, i see myself supreme. By the way, you would be surprised to know that even i don't consider myself strong in my vocabulary. I always keep learning new words and understand the needs. But, i am sure, if i start learning and keep up my determination i will certainly master the vocabulary in the future.
Remember one very important thing. Whatever you communicate, should be according to the needs and situation. For example, in your case, you wanted your employees to come up with innovative ideas for business development; therefore, you need to be very simple and precise in what you communicate. That's the reason, i kept my language and words pretty simple and easily understandable.
Have a great day!

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