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SUBJECT: HORIZONTAL TRANSFER FROM ASD: KAM (Justice & Others) TO ASD: FINANCE
To request a horizontal transfer from Assistant Director: KAM (Justice & Others) to Assistant Director (Finance).
I joined the department of Public Works on 03rd September 2007 and I have worked as Assistant Director: KAM (Justice & Others). Working as an Assistant Director: KAM (Justice & Others have advanced my skills. I have found this department to be professional and efficient with good communications and one that is supportive of employees and their development.
The main purpose of my request to request a transfer from Key Accounts Management Section to Finance Section is that I intend to further my studies in the finance field and workings for finance department will broaden my understanding of the finance environment.I intend to continue to enhance my professional growth with this department and move my career ahead with new assignments. I have a Bachelor of Commerce Degree majoring in Accounting and Business Management.
I have not been directly exposed to the finance environment but I am a hard worker and I believe I will be able to master the work within a short period of time. My increasing skills will bring further productivity for the department.
Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to serving the company in new and ever expanding capacities.
22nd September 2009 From South Africa, Kimberley
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3rd June 2010 From India, Hyderabad